This is my revised thesis statement.
"Sexuality online allows people to explore opportunities sexually that are almost unimaginable for some such as age differences of over 10 years, hidden genders, changing appearances, and "playing the game" leaving emotions out."
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megan, this needs a bit of work...it's a run on sentence and then it's really unclear what you want to write about...for instance:
Sexuality in Second Life allows residents to explore activities some would never imagine, such as changing their gender, altering their appearance and even playing the dating game with often disastrous outcomes...
see the difference? change the three points above if you wish and let's talk about this next week...
dr. c
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